帮忙看一下这篇英语作文有什么可以改进的地方？高考的作文~

帮忙看一下这篇英语作文有什么可以改进的地方？高考的作文~
When asked ‘who will you turn to for help’, most senior school students would take friends as their first choice. However, as far as I am concerned, we should try to solve the problems on our own.
When in trouble, we should always regard it as an opportunity to learn more instead of merely a trouble. For instance, an independent thinking and a comprehensive understanding of things can be cultivated during the problem-solving process. Also, turning to ourselves for help can improve our confidence as well as independence. Because overcoming difficulties by ourselves is such an excited experience as can encourage us to believe in ourselves.
Thus, be a superman when in trouble, not only to enhance our abilities, but also to show our strength to the world!