帮我看看这篇作文的语法上有没有错误.

【评点】
　　Yesterday Iwent to climb the mountain (爬山是一种活动,需要用 went climbing to themountain with my father,(逗号要改为句号或分号) our carstopped (parked) at a very high (删除 very)at the foot of the mountain,that is when two o’clock (改为由 when引导时间状语从句 when it was two o’clock).
　　At ten pasttwo,we started to climbing the mountain (改为开始具体行为的 started同climb),(改为句号) themountain was very steep (山势险峻仍然是现在的情况,改为现在时态).Twohours later,we climbed up (添加介词 to表示向上爬到山顶) the topof the mountain.We were very happy.The mountain’s air (mountain无生命,不用所有格形式) was veryfresh,and the scenery was very beautiful,I was very happy (与前文重复,改为“我尽情享受”).
　　I like themountains,I like the trip.
【修改后的全文】
　　Yesterday Iwent climbing to themountain with my father; our car stopped at a high at the foot of the mountain,when it was two o’clock.
　　At ten pasttwo,we started to climb the mountain.The mountain is very steep.Two hourslater,we climbed up to the top of the mountain.We were very happy.The air onthe mountaintop was very fresh,and the scenery was very beautiful,I enjoyed itas much as I like.
　　I like the mountains,I like the trip.

Yesterday I went to climb the mountain with my father,our car stopped at a very high at the foot of the mountain,that is when two o’clock.
At ten past two,we started to climbing the mountain,the m...

our car stopped at a very high at the foot of the mountain
按句述 stop at +宾语 介词+名词；介宾当地点状语
a very high at the foot of the mountain应该是名词词组
那么这个词组的中心词是什么
,that is when two o’clock.
w...

my father,our car 。。。这个地方不能用逗号，要用句号否则是杂糅句
at a very high。。。这个删掉
,that is when two o’clock.。。。改成when it is two o'clock
started to climbing。。。改成climb
mountain,the mountain......逗号变句号