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In the end of school year, I have been read a very good book called City of Ember.这句话改成:I have read a good book named City of Ember at the end of school year.
This was second book that I have been read that year and it was a very good book.改成:This is the book I have read that year and it is helful for me.
There was a part of the book that I think it was very interesting and exciting.
改成:I think part of the book are very interesting and exciting.
The Singing Day in the book was a very a part of climax in the story that was making me engrossed it, and it was my favorite part in the story.
改成:I get lost in the article the Singing Day in the book, which is my favorite part in the story.
There was a cliffhanger In the Singing day that encouraged me to continue to end of book.改成:It is very wonderful that the Singing Day article encourage me to continue to read the book.
When bad Mayor caught Lina that I thought Lina would die; although, it just a book that I was worrying about Lina when I read about this part and it was so stimulating and theatrical.
改成:I am worry about Lina that she would be dangerous when I read this part that the bad Mayor catch up Lina.
I may feel my heart-throb is very quick that it was like a movie flashing in my mind. when Lina escaped from the mayor that the lights was went out, she came to the top, she burst through the door to the roof and ran out.
改成:I could feel that my heart-throb move very swiftly and it like a movie flashing in my mind. When Lina manage to escape from the mayor, the lights was throw out and then she come to the top and rush out the door to ran.
I could felt that how much Doon was worrying about Lina and his feeling.
改成:At this time, I can imagine that Doon is very concerned Lina.
Although it was a science fiction book but I thought that there was a part of story that smeller in our life.
改成:Although it is a science fiction book, I think that part of the book is related our realistic life.
Lina and Doon were best friends, they had explored the back alleys and dimly lit edges of the city, but they began to grow apart because a little stupid thing that Lina laughed at Doon.
改成:Lina and Doon are best friends that they have explored the alleys and the dim edges of the city. However, one thing happened that give rise to broke them up.
I can remember when I was much younger that I had a best friend, we were always playing with each other, but one thing happened which that cause our friendship almost broke up.改成:When I was a child, I still remember that I have one of best friends, the good relationship between us has been broken up by a little thing.
I cannot remember why I argued with him but must be a little thing, I could felt my heart beating difficult like a stone on my heart that caused I cannot breathe anymore.改成:I don’t remember the reason why we argue with each other. I feel that it should not hapeen this thing and I have any regret with this.
As time goes by we seemed become strangers which that I forgot his name.
改成:Time passed so rapidly and we don’t recongnise each other now.
I thought the author very good at detail that there were many turning points made the story more interesting and thrilling.改成:I think the author is so clever that he make the article more intresting and thrlling.
Those turning points were decisions that Lina and Doon made, and I thought those turning points worked very well.改成:It is very effective that the turning points made by Lina and Doon which make the article more attractive.
However, author still left some doubt points for readers. I thought those doubt points may tell readers in the sequel such as what happened before they migrate to underground city. I was very curious about what happen in the sequel, so that I had fantasy.
改成:There is no doubt that the reader has some questions on the article.I think the questions or doubts would make readers think of what has happended before they migrate to undergound city.
They would find a new city that so difference between ember, and they would meet more people and solve more problems, also they would help more people. 改成:They could find a new city that it is different from Ember and at the same time,they also could help others and solve more problems they met.
For guessing that they may get marry and have many children.
改成:Suppose I make a conclusion that they may get married and there are many children for them.
连接起来就是:
I have read a good book named City of Ember at the end of school year.This was the book I have read that year and it was helful for me. I think part of the book are very interesting and exciting. I get lost in the article the Singing Day in the book, which is my favorite part in the story. It is very wonderful that the Singing Day article encourage me to continue to read the book. I am worry about Lina that she would be dangerous when I read this part that the bad Mayor catch up Lina. I could feel that my heart-throb move very swiftly and it like a movie flashing in my mind. When Lina manage to escape from the mayor, the lights was throw out and then she come to the top and rush out the door to ran. At this time, I can imagine that Doon is very concerned Lina.
Although it is a science fiction book, I think that part of the book is related our realistic life.Lina and Doon are best friends that they have explored the alleys and the dim edges of the city. However, one thing happened that give rise to broke them up.When I was a child, I still remember that I have one of best friends, the good relationship between us has been broken up by a little thing. I don’t remember the reason why we argue with each other. I feel that it should not hapeen this thing and I have any regret with this. Time passed so rapidly and we don’t recongnise each other now.
I think the author is so clever that he make the article more intresting and thrlling.
It is very effective that the turning points made by Lina and Doon which make the article more attractive. However, author still left some doubt points for readers. :There is no doubt that the reader has some questions on the article.I think the questions or doubts would make readers think of what has happended before they migrate to undergound city. They could find a new city that it is different from Ember and at the same time,they also could help others and solve more problems they met.Suppose I make a conclusion that they may get married and there are many children for them.
楼主,你的英语表达很混乱,看了半天才改了下来.你对从句还没有懂,还有现在完成时态没有完全弄懂.连接词和介词你也要多看.
希望对你有帮助.
祝你学习进步.
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