请大家帮我检查一下这篇书面表达有没有错,好的给采纳! hello,my name iswang

请大家帮我检查一下这篇书面表达有没有错,好的给采纳! hello,my name iswang
请大家帮我检查一下这篇书面表达有没有错,好的给采纳! hello,my name iswang ling i am a chinese gilr my english name is kim i am 12 years old four members are in my family.
,my prents my brother and i. my favorite color are red and white. this is my red phone
.my telephone number is 384897 谢谢啦!