请帮我修改这篇英文自我介绍的错误

请帮我修改这篇英文自我介绍的错误
Good morning.I am very glad to be here for your interview.My name is XXX,I am 24 years old.I was born in Beijing.
I graduated from Beijing Jiaotong University and majored in Human Resource Management.I like music and reading books,especially economical books.
I have a lot of professional knowledge which made be able to work efficiently.My individuality can be described as an honest,a strong sense of duty,positive and passional,and work well under heavy pressure
It is my honor to apply this job.I do believe that with my solid educational background and ample working experience,I would be an excellent worker in your company.Please give me a chance.Thank you very much.
欧逸桑 1年前 已收到3个回答 举报

3h2i 幼苗

共回答了21个问题采纳率:90.5% 举报

Good morning. I am very excited to be selected for the interview. My name is __, I am 24 years old and I am from Beijing.
I graduated from Beijing Jiatong University and was majored in Human Resource Management. With my professional knowledge in this field, I am able to work efficiently.
Leisure wise, I like music and enjoy reading a lot, especially books related to economics.
As a person, I am often described and acknowledged as honest, positive, passionate with a strong sense of responsibility and work well under heavy pressure.
I believe that with my solid education background and rich working experience, I will contribute and be a valuable assess for your company.
Again, I am glad to have this interview opportunity. If you have any questions for me now, please feel free to ask me anything. ..

1年前

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没什麽大不了 幼苗

共回答了1个问题 举报

请问您是北交的吗,面试用什么定语从句,又不是写作文,要把话说的让人听懂,断成小的简单句。第二句就不太礼貌,不是your interview,是the interview,I am very glad to be here to attend the interview. 这样雇佣双方才是平等礼貌的。

1年前

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cuidan 幼苗

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which can make me do my work efficiently我觉得这样写更好点

1年前

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