高考作文 假如你是一名高三学生,最近你看了一则央视公益广告Family且深有感触.请用英语 你校英语报写一篇立志学习,感

Recently a public service advertisement Family has impressed me （and moved） me deeply.
评价：不错
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In the picture, ‘F’ stands for father, ‘M’ stands for mother, and ‘I’ is me.
评价：描述性文字中规中矩
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The picture reveals a theme that wherever there is love, there is responsibility.
评价：好评
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【新段】
When I was young, parents take the responsibility and （hold back）【shoulder】 rain and wind (by themselves)【for us.】
评价：hold back 读不懂
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Father （earns money and ）supports the family, while mother （cook meals and） do【es】 all the housework.
评价：不要重复
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In constract, I the one who （are）is loved and protected.
评价：语法错能忍吗
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As I grow up day by day, I find that parents （become old）【are getting older and older】.
评价：怪怪的
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Father has to use a stick to help him walk, and mother aren’t beautiful as she were.
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I realize that it（’s） 【should be my】time I took responsibility and care for the family in turn. 【and enable my parents enjoy the happiness that they can get rid of burdens】
评价：不通啊!你读～
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The public advertisement make me in deep thought.
评价：有这样的用法?
修改：用give me a lesson
Our parents work hard to let us grow up happily, but used up their energy and became old in the end.
评价：蛮感动的
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We finally grow up but to find they are old and 【in?】 grey.
评价：but to !严重错误连词后面加句子,扣分!你妹!气氛都被破坏了
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We were brought up under selfless love from a 【naive】 baby to an 【mature】 adult.
评价：略显单调
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（Since ）parents become old and we are （young）【surprised that ww are strong】,【.】【It's the very time for us to create a happy life for our parents. So】 we should take the responsibily and do things for our family.
评价：充实之
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Action speaks louder than words. I love you, father and mother!
评价：这次结尾好了很多!点赞,开头还得再吸引人一点.避免语法错误.
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