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This week I submitted the assignment for marketing introduction OT to construct a solid base for my paper. The paper outline is evaluated by my instructor in class on a one on one basis. For this I tried to make it a best one. During the tutoring, my instructor pointed out the mistakes in the outline one by one. According to the instructor, although my outline contains lots of details in its content, it seems to be too complicated as a outline. Furthmore, it doesn't state clearly what the important parts and the less important parts are, and the argument is not explained in a clear way either. Some key points such as why, how and conclusion are too brief. However, as a contrast, too many information is included for arguing and analyzing part, which is too complex.
In general there are no big mistakes in it, thought it needs amending and improving in many places, especially in those places where some of the words should be ommited to make the part shorter or some more words should be added to make the part longer and more detailed. I hope the revisions could be made in my formal paper.
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