请英语大仙帮帮忙,看看本人的英语作文有哪些要修改的地方,初二水平的书面表达.

ode有骑车的意思,可以直接rode to the park
后面应该是Arriving at the park,因为动词和主语是主动关系
reads 错了,过去式还是read
后面一句beside 是介词,不能直接用,你可以写成 Mike ate some nice food ,together with Bob(虽然这还是中国式英语,但至少语法没错）
后面eating hamburger,hamburger不用加定冠词
一只猴子来偷他的汉堡包可以写成 a monkey came to steal his hamburger （这里逻辑是不是有问题?MIKE在吃汉堡包,那么猴子还怎么偷?是不是应该用“夺”更为合适?）
再后面一句,MIKE很生气,站起来去追猴子,sat up 是坐下的意思.站起来应该是stood up,
追的话,个人觉得是chase 好些,pursue有点追逐梦想的意思,
再后一句,He followed the monkey语法没错（但是follow是跟随的意思,你想表达的应该是迫切的追赶猴子,用词不当）
后一句missing in a tree 在树里消失,我不明白你想表达的意思.
后一句Mike couldn't find the monkey at last.这句正确.
最后一句feels应该改为 felt,整个事件都是过去时态
打了那么多字,

Very good

Mike and Bob rode the bikes to the park(go to the park太罗嗦了，还有他们应该是骑两辆自行车吧？)
After arriving at the park...
Bob took out some books and read them.(注意动词时态)
Mike was beside Bob and ate some ni...

只改语法错误，表达与词汇需要积累。1.Arrived at the park,Mike and Bob sat on the grass. arrived 改成arriving，现在分词作状语。 2..Bob took some books outside and reads them。有两个错误 1）took out 而不是took outside 2）reads 改成read 时态错误，整篇都...