帮我修改这篇英语作文帮我看看我的这篇文章哪些地方有错误,语法错误什么都帮我改过来,或者有更好的写法也告诉我~weird

帮我修改这篇英语作文
帮我看看我的这篇文章哪些地方有错误,语法错误什么都帮我改过来,或者有更好的写法也告诉我~
weird dream
I had Two dreams yesterday.
one is about my grandfather,the other one is about my grandmather.
I dreamed that my grandfather planed a war,and my whole family struggled in the war with a lot of bad people.though I didn't know why they were bad .
Then I found my father in a dark room,and someone hide there who was going to shoot him .I tried my best to remind my father that he was in danger,at the same time I get three kettles nearby ,in order to hit the bad man.
Fortunately it worked.
Finally we defeated them.
Then I dreamed that there has something happened on my grandmother.
so I must do something for her.such as making meals and washing clothes.
I felt a lot of love when I did anything for her,as she never want me to be tired .
I waked up in the morning ,felt sorry for them,and thought about what I can do for my grandparents in the real world.
Anna公主 1年前 已收到3个回答 举报

gt8020 幼苗

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很好啊,但是语句不通,分段不够好,写作文时要用心,反复修改不必要的不须写.

1年前

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弓虽女千 幼苗

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没有什么文章啊

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zhouc29 花朵

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很正确呀、

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