■纠错（十万火急）Dear officer:I am a student of HAMK University of A

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Dear officer:
I am a student of HAMK University on Applying science.I have been there for a year.I don't know whether you would accept my visa material extension if it were sent personally.Because I have been in my country (China) for this summer holiday.Unfortunately ,Embassy of Finland that of Beijing don`t accept Visa extensions but only new visa applications. The date of my return ticket is on Sep. 2nd but the deadline of my visa is on Aug. 1st . Could you offer me a solution ,please?
Looking forward to your response
Best regards
Guang Ye

Dear officer:
I am a student of HAMK University of Applied sciences. I have been there for a year. There is a question that whether you accept my material of visa extension if it would be sent pe...

i have been here for a year作者现在还在外国呢，所以是here
there is a question that whether you have accepted my material很明显作者是问有没有收到，所以应是完成时
because i will be in my country作者想说的是他将要回国过暑假
looking forward for your reply to do sth for sth

Dear officer，
question whether you accept
Beijing didn't have
some solution