大家帮我看看这篇英语短文有没有问题

大家帮我看看这篇英语短文有没有问题
Riding the horse on the grassland
During the trip,I also had an unforgettable experience:riding the horse on the grassland.It was the first time that I should ride the horse alone.
The horse which would be ridden by me was a brown and beautiful horse.And,it was very small,it was the smallest horse I have ever ridden.At first,I was afraid of falling down from the horse.I was very nervous and couldn’t draw myself up.But,after nearly half an hour for practicing,I knew how to ride a horse.I began to ride the horse and enjoyed the warm sunshine happily.
I had a good time on the grassland.What a happy life the people there have!
The end of the summer holiday
Summer holiday will be finished soon.The homework has almost finished.During the summer holiday,I learnt a lot,broaden my mind by travelling and help others by doing the voleenteer work.Now,it’s the end of the summer holiday,a new term is coming.The first thing of the new term is the test which can detection our homework.
I hope I can have an interesting new term.Let cheer for it!
ldm小冬 1年前 已收到5个回答 举报

gggfeifei 幼苗

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Riding the horse on the grassland
During the trip,I also had an unforgettable experience:riding the horse on the grassland.It was the first time I rode the horse alone.
The horse which would be ridden by me was a brown(and去掉) beautiful horse.And,it was very small,it was the smallest horse I have ever ridden..At first,I was afraid of falling down from the horse.I was very nervous and couldn’t draw myself up.But,after nearly half an hour for(of) practicing(practice),I knew how to ride a horse.I began to ride the horse and enjoyed the warm sunshine happily.
I had a good time on the grassland.What a happy life the people there have!

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ldm小冬 举报

你告诉我在那里改了

举报 gggfeifei

我晕,最前面一段有一点修改,后面的我加括号了,

ldm小冬 举报

麻烦第二段也帮我看看

举报 gggfeifei

The end of the summer holiday Summer holiday will (be finished)改成OVER soon. The homework has almost (加上been) finished. During the summer holiday, I learnt a lot, broaden my mind by travelling and help(此处加,ed是过去对吧) others (by)改成 to do (doing去掉) work (加上as a volunteer此处是我帮你改的,我觉得这样比较好). Now, it’s the end of the summer holiday,a new term is coming. The first thing of the new term is the test which can detection(这个要用动词detect) our homework. I hope I can have an interesting new term.Let(加上'S )cheer for it!

天情舞 幼苗

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提几个建议……
the horse I rid was brown and beautiful .What's more, it was so little that I never rid a smaller .
learn to 比know 更强调“学会”的意思
I had learnt to ride a horse .
结尾太刻意了,换一个自然点的。

1年前

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cwwqp0123 幼苗

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我大概看了一眼,可能不太细致,但应该没有问题,望采纳哦

1年前

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本本阿诺 幼苗

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问题不大,请采纳!

1年前

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ann777777 幼苗

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practicing也可换成practice
我没看出其它问题。
写得可以。

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