请大家帮我看看这篇英文作文里面有没有错误

You did a venderful job,just with some little grammar problem.So let me try do some thing for you if you don't mind...
Kevin Garnett is my favourite basketball player.He is very handsome and sexy.He's from the US and plaied basketball for Celtics,Boston
I love him very much because he worked very hard.No matter how difficult,he never gave up.Till the end of his seccess,he got the coveted championship ring.But now he is suffered from injuries.He is no longer able to touch rebouds above.But I still cared about him just like before.Because I am not only appreciate his playing but also his attitude for everything like:serious,persistent and fearless.He taught me how to active during my life.Of course he is very attractive that's only part of all the reasons that I love him.
He is my favorite person.I will love him forever.

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试试看！你的文章句子很简单而且结构很单一，可以用一些复杂点的句子让文章更美。
Kevin Garnett is my favourite person who is handsome and sexy.He is a basketball player of Boston Celtics, USA.
I am totally fond of him because he wor...

Kevin Garnett IS my favourite man.He is very handsome and sexy.He IS （作文不应该用's) from the US.He is a basketball player from Boston Celtics.
I love him very much because he WORKS very hard.No matter...