指出我英语作文中的不足与缺点Friendship is one of the noblest and the most

Friendship is one of the noblest and the most significant feeling between human being.
【W】hen（每句开头都要大写） you are in dress , it can make you happy 【.】 （英文的排比句也一样是句号）
【W】hen you are in difficuty it can call forth your courage and confidence to step out of all the troubles【.】
【When】you 【lost】 your way, it 【enlighten you 】find the correct way 【and】go ahead.
注意大小写和标点符号,后面的,无特殊原因就不纠正了.
【F】or 【example】【,】（必须有逗号）liubei finally become a wise emperor with guanyu 【'】（去掉） and zhangfei's 【s】（应该是‘s）help.
If without them, maybe liubei is just a ordinary person.
（这里说的是如果没有他们的鼎立帮助,刘备只是一个普通人）
It shows a fact that friendship is indispensable to every one.
From the sample above, even liubei are exceedingly intelligent, but without guanyu and zhangfei he may not be success.
To sum up, we can draw a conclusion from this, friendship is importantance to every person.
We should value(是说尊重吗?respect ) friendship and get along well with every friend we have.
That's the only way, we can be a succeed and marvellous man.
That's the only way, our society will be much better for us.
有些单词可能有很多含义.比如你文中用到的,smash 虽然有非常成功的意思,但是他最常用的一个意思是碾碎的,比如smashed potato,土豆泥.
你可以想象smash man,在一个洋人的眼里应该是多恐怖的一个场面了吧.
所以尽量不要用一些生僻的词,常用词的生僻含义更糟.
还有就是标点符号,英文单词后面紧跟标点符号,没有空格,符号后面是空格,然后再是单字,如,This is a example. yes, it is.