英文个人简历,求改正,急,分不多,全给了.

英文个人简历,求改正,急,分不多,全给了.
My name is Xu shilin,a graduating student from Huizhou NO.1 middle school.I have been to Hongkong for several times.And I consider that it must be the spirit of HK which totally capture me,includes its vigour,fashionable city apperances,friendly people and cutting-edge life style.What’s more,excellent reputation,abundant educational resources,pure learning atmosphere,all of aboves make HKU an irresistible universitiy.
I was sent to Shenzhen nanshan experimental primary school and left my parents when I was 5 years old.And I spent another 4 years in Shanghai for a further education.This independent experience might be too tough to a little boy,but it really made me strong enough to undertake whatever comes to me and boardened my horizon.So,I have the confidence to fit in HK if I would get a chance to study here.
I have many interests in my spare time,such as music,sports,auto,and architecture.As a member of our school’s student union,I helped to organize several school activities.As a member of our class,I also helped to scheme our class uniform,class trip and so on.Not only these works made me more skillful,but also Ican gain much pleasure in the process of struggling together with my classmates.
It’s all known that the economics of HKU is tip in Asia.So as its student.I think this curricular will be the best platform for me to give full play to my ability.Enterring HKU is the first step of realizing my future plan.I am ready to make my life picture more pleasant to look at and repay those who love me.I sincerely hope that HKU would provide me a chance.