作文再次修改In the modern society,it is generally believed that we
作文再次修改
In the modern society,it is generally believed that we can’t live without money in the daily life.When buying living goods and daily necessities the most important and essential thing we consider is money.It goes without saying that money helps us to achieve our personal goals and improve quality of life.To some extent,money improves not only our material life but also spiritual life.
However,everything has two sides.Mammon worship also brings us many bad effects.Maybe,we’re unable to afford true love,youth and health.The asset we should value,aside from money,is long-standing familial affection and friendship.Take Warren Buffett for example,more than 99% of his wealth has been donated to the foundations benefiting schools and medical organizations.In contrast,his family and he give up noting they need by fulfilling this 99% pledge.He is proud of what he has done and feels happiness.Whether money is the root of happiness or source of evils all depends on us.Only by taking a correct attitude can we not pursue money blindly.
对了，是in the modern society还是in modern society?
In the modern society,it is generally believed that we can’t live without money in the daily life.When buying living goods and daily necessities the most important and essential thing we consider is money.It goes without saying that money helps us to achieve our personal goals and improve quality of life.To some extent,money improves not only our material life but also spiritual life.
However,everything has two sides.Mammon worship also brings us many bad effects.Maybe,we’re unable to afford true love,youth and health.The asset we should value,aside from money,is long-standing familial affection and friendship.Take Warren Buffett for example,more than 99% of his wealth has been donated to the foundations benefiting schools and medical organizations.In contrast,his family and he give up noting they need by fulfilling this 99% pledge.He is proud of what he has done and feels happiness.Whether money is the root of happiness or source of evils all depends on us.Only by taking a correct attitude can we not pursue money blindly.
对了，是in the modern society还是in modern society?
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In the【去掉the】 modern society,it is generally believed【it is common sense】 that we can’t【cannnot】 live without money in the daily life【in daily life】.When buying living goods and daily necessities【此处逗号,and前后2词选一】 the most important and essential【去掉and essential】 thing we consider is money.It goes without saying that money helps us to achieve our personal goals and improve quality of life【life quality就可】.To some extent,money improves not only our material life but also spiritual life.
However,everything has two sides.Mammon worship also brings us【去掉us】 many bad effects.Maybe,we’re【we are】 unable to afford true love,youth and health.The asset we should value,aside from money,is long-standing familial affection and friendship.Take Warren Buffett for example,more than 99% of his wealth has been donated to the foundations benefiting schools and medical organizations.In contrast,his family and he give up noting they need by fulfilling this 99% pledge.He is proud of what he has done and feels happiness【happy】.Whether money is the root of happiness or source of evils all depends on us.Only by taking a correct attitude can we not pursue money blindly.
PS:我记不清了,你这是不是雅思作为.如果是的话,注意作为里不要用缩写形式,如can't,要写全.还有,英语中是好用不同句中用不同的词表达同一个意思,如they believe,they think.在同一句子中,注意避免同义词重复.
However,everything has two sides.Mammon worship also brings us【去掉us】 many bad effects.Maybe,we’re【we are】 unable to afford true love,youth and health.The asset we should value,aside from money,is long-standing familial affection and friendship.Take Warren Buffett for example,more than 99% of his wealth has been donated to the foundations benefiting schools and medical organizations.In contrast,his family and he give up noting they need by fulfilling this 99% pledge.He is proud of what he has done and feels happiness【happy】.Whether money is the root of happiness or source of evils all depends on us.Only by taking a correct attitude can we not pursue money blindly.
PS:我记不清了,你这是不是雅思作为.如果是的话,注意作为里不要用缩写形式,如can't,要写全.还有,英语中是好用不同句中用不同的词表达同一个意思,如they believe,they think.在同一句子中,注意避免同义词重复.
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