I have many good friends,but i think Nina is my best friend.

I have many good friends,but i think Nina is my best friend.we first met when we were 6 years old.I started at her school; the teacher asked her to look after me,we soon became friends.
First let me say something about her.Nina is 16 years old now.she is a pretty girl with big black eyes,she has short black hair,beautiful red lips,she's very white and quite small,she likes wearing T-shirts and short skirts.I think she looks like snow white princess.
Nina is the kind of person who likes telling jokes.she is always happy and smiling.She's very cheerful.however she is a bit careful about her appearance.she never goes out without wearing smart dress and putting on make up.
Nina is very crazy about superstars.she usually spends most of her time watchinng chinese music videos on MTV or chanel V.she also likes watching chinese TV drama,too.she filled her bedroom with many singer's and artist's stickers.
she is my neighbor,we grew up and studied together.so we know every things about each other.when we were kids,we always liked the same games.now we're into the same music; singers,and artists.we're also the same idol's fans.I've never met a person who is crazier about superstars likes her.although she sometimes is a bit crazy,i like her.
注:大小写的不用改,只改Grammar可以了.
jdyy_35 1年前 已收到2个回答 举报

好吃虫虫 春芽

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I started at her school是不是指转到她的学校?
可以改成 when i transfered to her school
First let me say something about her,这里的first好像最好写成first of all吧
she's very white and quite small ,quiet small都不是形容人的 可以省略
so we know every things about ,直接写everything
we're into the same music; singers,and artists
music 和singers,and artists 不是同类的吧还有music最好改成music style
we're also the same idol's fans有点啰嗦,直接说we share the same idol
I've never met a person who is crazier about superstars likes her.
改成 I've never met a person who is crazier about superstars than she does.
上面可能有点小错 如果发现了可以指出来 我的这个仅供参考啦

1年前

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计划中 幼苗

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"putting on make up"?不懂。。。。watchinng----watching
she filled(fills) her bedroom with many singer's and artist's stickers.
every things----everything
I've never met a person who is crazier about superstars likes her这句应用比较级,likes改成than,或who is as crazy about superstars as her

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