leom_lee
幼苗
共回答了18个问题采纳率:88.9% 举报
第一段
1. senior school students 是高中在读学生;students who graduate from high school 是高中毕业生,或者索性就用 young adults/young people.
2. woke 拼写有误,应该为work.
3. choose to having a woke 改为choose to find a job.
第二段
1. Wore after senior school realy have their advantage.(上文已经提到的错误不再赘述)
应该为Choosing a career after finishing high school's study really has some advantages.
(注意主谓一致, 这个属于严重语法错)
2. 注意big的最高级要双写g,the biggest;
3. just as every coin has two sides 已经被用烂了,不要再用了;非要用的话这个也比前者好一些,即double-edge sword 双刃剑.
4. the disadvantage of attempting a career life is apparent.
( 谓语动词是is不是have/has, 这句话是主系表结构,xxx是显而易见的.)
5. adapt circumstance of audlt. 改为 adapt to the harsh realities of the world.
(adapt to sth, harsh 残酷的)
6. low license --> low degree, opportunates --> opportunities;
总结:1.注意主谓一致的问题,主语是不可数名词或是动名词谓语动词要用第三人称单数(一般现在时);2. 单词拼写问题要注意.3. 不要凭空创造句子,尽量写读过背过的句子或表达,拿不准的宁可写简单句,不要写复合句.4. 题目扣得很好,如果解决了上述细节问题,将是一片非常不错的四级作文.5. 另外开头结尾一定好好写,more and more 就别再用了,the increasing number of students xxx 就好很多.
补充两点:一楼说的some不能修饰如money一类的不可数名词不正确,some后接不可数名词,可数名词复数都可以,不要被误导啊!
二楼所说的写作不要用第二人称you,说得十分正确!尽量使用第三人称,如they.
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