关于一篇初中英语作文,通不通顺,语法上···

关于一篇初中英语作文,通不通顺,语法上···
明天就要交了,尽管不是我的,Thank you very much!
不好意思，英语作文是这篇
I have a computer,since my father bought it,it started to become my friend,I can use it to study,can also be used to entertainment,to music,play games,make friends.But more than playing on a bad eyesight,so when they play a lot of attention,although it is small in size,however it has a very wide range of knowledge,With it,the study also gave me great help,I am very of like it,it's my friend-computer.
我有一台电脑，自从爸爸买回它，它就开始成为我的朋友，我可以用它来学习，也可以用来娱乐，可以听歌，玩游戏，交朋友。但是玩多了对视力不好，所以玩时还要注意很多，它虽然面积不大，但是里面却有着非常广泛的知识，有了它，在学习上也给了我很大的帮助，我非常的喜欢它，它就是我的朋友-computer.
这些都是我朋友的，作文，对作文的解释 (This essay is not mine，OK?)