我写了一个四人的情景对话,请各位大仙不吝赐教,把有错误的地方写出来,或者觉得结构不好,进行大改!谢

我写了一个四人的情景对话,请各位大仙不吝赐教,把有错误的地方写出来,或者觉得结构不好,进行大改!谢
Crystal:Oh,Wes?Oh!Hello!Long time no see!
Wes:En?Oh!Hi!Crystal!I miss you very much!How you been lately?
Crystal:En,just so-so~And,You and your girlfriend?
Wes:Haa,We want to get married in two years.
Crystal:Congratulations!And I remember that she is ten years younger than you.Oh,Why don't you two been together?Where is she?
Wes:She is shopping in the Inzone.Shopping is a part of the life for a woman.Oh,this boy is very handsome.Is this your.
Crystal:Yeah...This is my brother.His name is Tom.Tom,this is Wes,my best friend.
Tom:Hello,I'm Tom.Great to see you!
Wes:Great to see you,too.I have ever seen your photoes from your sister.And You are more handsome than younger.
Tom:Thanks...and I always hear about you from my sister.My sister said...
Lily:En,Is this Tom?
Tom:Oh,dear,I haven't seen you for a long time!How's it going?
Lily:I'm great...But I don't like my boyfriend.He always want to get married,but you know,I'm too young!And even!he don't like me to go shopping!He's always like a geezer!I don't think I have any words with he!What should I do!
Tom:That's easy,say goodbye to he,and,go with me!
Lily:Oh,darling...but...
Tom:Okok,I know you are a simple girl.Ok,let me to introduce my sister to you.This is my sister,Crystal...
Wes:Lily!
Lily:Oh,Wes,oh,I don't know you are here.You know,I love you very much,and,please don't be angry with me,ok?I'm just kidding.And I have no relationship with Tom.
Tom:Lily!
Lily:Oh,Tom,In fact,I love you,too.And...
Crystal:So who is your really love?Please don't hurt my friend's heart.And my brother's!
Wes:Oh,no!I won't take it!I am dying...I will go to Hongkong right now!And never to return to here!
Crystal:Hi!Wes!Don't be sad!Hi!Where are you going...
Tom:Lily?
Lily:Listen to me...
Tom:I don't want to hear any words!We are over!Including friendship and love!Please don't let me to see you again!
Lily:Tom...Wes...Oh...What should I do...