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题目：How to Improve Student's Mental Health
提纲：
（1）大学生的心理健康十分重要
（2）因此，学校可以。。。。
（3）我们自己应当。。。。
How to Improve Student's Mental Health
Colledge student's mental health is very important.On campus,they will finish their student-days and gradually become a real social person.In this period,they must discard their infantility and study how to shouder the responsibility.So it is very important to improve student's mental health.
For improving student's mental health,colledge must set up a comprehensive regulation.Firstly,courses on psychological health should be given to tell students what will they encounter in society and what can they do to solve the matter.Secondly,professional psychologist should be provided to help students recover from mental block.Moreover,colledge should provide many vocations to students to undergo an experience.
As far as we are concerned,we must believe in ourselves.When encountering some difficulties, we can't be afraid and we must adjust our mindset to solve them.If we hold a healthy mindset,nothing can be a barrier on our successful ways.