托福口语 Task1 求修改指教~

托福口语 Task1 求修改指教~
Task 1
Which campus improvement do you suggest your school to invest in:swimming pool,cafeteria or dormitory.Please give specific reasons to support your opinion.
I'd like my school to improve the dormitory.
Dormitory is where we’ll live for a long time.Its environment is closely related to ourdaily life and a better dormitory environment will let us live a more comfortable life.Taking my school for an example,my school dormitory has no air condition,so it’s always too hot and humid to fall sleep during summertime.As a result,we often feel listless in the daytime.If the school could change this situation,we'll be more energetic and vigorous to study in the class.
求大神改改expression~
选择dormitory我只想出了一个观点.有没有思维开阔的能多给几个理由?