一篇初二水平的英语作文.希望大家找找哪有有错误告诉我订正.

一篇初二水平的英语作文.希望大家找找哪有有错误告诉我订正.
Is A family teacher necessary.
More and more middle school students are going to having family teacher .Some people think that it is necessary.But they are also some people don't agree.
In my opinion,I prefer the second viewpoint.First of all,students need some rest at the weekend .Than some family teachers are in the purpose of making money.Therefore,family teacher is not necessary .We can study well if we hard working.
如果还有错的地方告诉我,已经改了某些地方,但本人英语水平不好,错的地方也找不出来.