请帮助解决是否正确：书面表达 来自英国的Jim是你的新同学,你的好朋友Tom想知道他的一些情况

请帮助解决是否正确：书面表达 来自英国的Jim是你的新同学,你的好朋友Tom想知道他的一些情况
书面表达 来自英国的Jim是你的新同学,你的好朋友Tom想知道他的一些情况,根据下面的表格的相关信息告诉给Tom,写一篇字数至少60字的短文.
Peoplex05 Age x05Identiy(身份)x05 Color of the clothes
Jimx05 13x05 Studentx05 yellow
Jim's sister 15x05 Studentx05 green
Jim's father 40x05 Teacherx05 black
Jim's motherx0536x05Teacherx05white
Hello ,Tom!I have a good friend .His name is Jim.Jim is thirteen years age ,Jim is a student .Jim like color is yellow .Jim has a sister .Jim's sister is fifteen years age .Jim's sister is a student too .Jim's sister like color is green ,Jim's father is forty year age .Jim's father is a teacher .Jim's father like color is black .Jim's mother is thirty-six .Jim's mother is a teacher too .Jim's mother like color is white .Jim has a happy family!
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